By Karlie
The best playground is a huge one with a pool. And a sky tower. It will also have a zip line that goes through the jungle. You will also be able to see lions, tigers, and elephants. My playground will also have big bouncy balls like on Wipeout. It will also have a slide that is 9,000 feet tall, that is really swirly and scary. To me that is the best play ground.
It's an awesome idea. My favorite is the nine thusand foot tall slide and the zipline. awesome imagination
ReplyDeleteGABE
i like it because is short and the nine thausand part and i like the part about the animals and the elephant
ReplyDeleteISAI
Dear Karlie,
ReplyDeleteYou had awesome ideas like the slide and the animals. You could've added an introduction sentence and an ending sentence. You could've also combined some of the sentences together and used commas instead of periods.
~ Nora
Pretty cool if you ask me! The pool is a good idea for the summer, but make it inside and make it switch to a hot-tub for the winter and for it to be better kept clean during fall! For the zip-line make it so you can see wolves too! Its cool how it is, too! Also, i've never played Wipeout, except on a demo, so i dont know what the big bouncy balls are like.
ReplyDeleteAll around pretty cool! Very interesting and creativity!
-Chad
Rememder playground is one word. Also rememder not to start a sentenes with and.
ReplyDelete~Karlie~